#ShiRensaHaiku Dawn

What can you see now?
The darkness is all around.
Hush of night surrounds.

Hush of night surrounds.
Then light, a streak on horizon.
A rooster is ruffled.

A rooster is ruffled.
Its cawing, the silence breaks.
Dreamy eyes, shut tight.

Dreamy eyes, shut tight.
Dreaming love’s dreams, sublime.
On lips, a smile.

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Born in the year 1968, my childhood was spent amidst the beautiful scenic landscape of a small town in India, Ranchi. Though an engineer by qualification, reading, writing and cooking are my passions. Another thing that I am passionate about is my country, India. As they say, a lifetime is probably not enough to explore the whole of India. Currently based in Kolkata, I can be reached at gdutta17@gmail.com. View all posts by gdutta17

8 thoughts on “#ShiRensaHaiku Dawn”

Ronovan says:

August 8, 2020 at 2:25 am

Nice. I like it. It progressed as a story, just like it should. Has imagery. It’s an original topic. Great job. And thanks for trying my new styles. 🙂

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1. gdutta17 says:
  
  August 8, 2020 at 10:23 am
  
  Thanks so much for going through the Haiku and providing me with your feedback. I have just started writing Haikus and have got absolutely besotted with them. Love the way A Haiku aims to provide that one moment of eternal bliss, something akin to a fragrance that comes with a whiff and then lingers on in the mind for a while. Your comments mean a lot to me. I like the style developed by you; makes it possible to weave together a chain of thoughts in the form of a story, something which I have attempted to do here. Thanks once again. 😊🙏
  
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  1. Ronovan says:
    
    August 8, 2020 at 11:35 am
    
    Thank you for the kind words. 🙂
    
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-Eugenia says:

August 9, 2020 at 8:36 pm

Truly lovely. This is a perfect example of multiple haiku that express a similar theme or montage of images. The haikai form is known as the haiku sequence.

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1. gdutta17 says:
  
  August 9, 2020 at 9:32 pm
  
  Thank you so much for your appreciation. These help me a lot in understanding the concepts of Haiku writing better and improving my skills. Really appreciate the detailed comment. 😊🙏
  
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  1. -Eugenia says:
    
    August 10, 2020 at 12:37 am
    
    You’re most welcome. 😉
    
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TheHiddenEdge says:

August 9, 2020 at 10:08 pm

I have never written a Haiku Sequence before, I am now inspired! 😊

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